Wow a very unuasual way to ask for marriage.
Nice story though!!
Thx for that.
Well, wow, fantastic!!
That was damn too good of you.
You left me spellbound with the last part.
Oh well, nice but well rather direct but still not bad.
You must be thinking who i am to tell you these.
Well, i just hope that i can make you write much better than this.
Your stories are good but i'm sure you can do better.
It was not a bad story.
You have a good potential, just exploit it to the maximum!!